Turn Telling Into Showing
Convert flat 'telling' passages into vivid, in-scene 'showing' — sensory and specific — without changing what happens.
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Prompt
Help me turn telling into showing.
The passage (where I've told the reader something instead of putting them in the moment):
{{passage}}
The emotion or state I want to land: {{emotion_or_state}}
Point of view and tense (e.g. first person past, third limited present): {{pov_and_tense}}
Please:
- Rewrite the flat or summarized parts as **in-scene showing** — concrete sensory detail, physical reaction, action, and telling specifics that let the reader feel the emotion instead of being told it.
- Keep exactly the same events, facts, and outcome — change how it's rendered, not what happens.
- Stay in the point of view and tense I gave you.
- Don't overdo it — not every line needs expanding; some telling is fine for pace. Show me where it earns the space.
Give me the revision, then point out one or two spots where telling is actually the right call so I don't over-correct. Match my existing voice — make it feel like my writing, sharpened, not like a different author. If the passage is missing context you'd need, ask.